Um LESARION optimal zu gestalten und fortlaufend zu verbessern verwenden wir zur Auswertung Cookies. Mehr Informationen über Cookies findest du in unseren
Datenschutzbestimmungen . Wenn du LESARION nutzst erklärst du dich mit der Verwendung von Cookies einverstanden.
Open sidebar
Neue Besucher oder Stream-Eintraege im Menue vorhanden
Aus dem Geheimordner auswählen
Position auf Karte verfeinern
‹
›
Wer mag meine Kurzgeschichte probelesen?
Anzahl der verfügbaren Boosts: 0 premium account
Du hast leider keine Boosts mehr zur Verfügung. premium account
Beitrag einblenden
Hallo...
ich hab eine Kurzgeschichte geschrieben und würde sie gern von jemandem "probelesen" lassen. Hat eine von euch Lust dazu? Die Geschichte heißt "Gefühle ändern sich" ist ca. 16 Seiten lang und handelt von einer vierer-Verkettung. Zwei Freundinnen verbringen eine Zeit im Ausland an einer Uni und wohnen recht beengt zusammen. Es schleichen sich neue Gefühle in die Freundschaft ein und das bringt die bisher geführten Heterobeziehungen ganz schön durcheinander. Und die zwei Frauen auch.
Ich wäre dankbar, wenn die Leserin mir Rückmeldung geben könnte zu folgenden Punkten:
1. Ist der rote Faden da? Oder gibt's irgendwo logische Fehler/"Brüche" in der Geschichte?
2. Tippfehler, Ausdrücke
Danke! Susanne
Zum Teilen muss JavaScript aktiviert sein.
gap-1.5
h-0 h-0.5 h-1 h-1.5 h-2 h-2.5 h-3 h-3.5
h-4 h-5 h-6 h-7 h-8 h-9 h-10 h-11 h-12
h-14 h-16 h-20 h-24 h-28 h-32 h-36 h-40
h-44 h-48 h-52 h-56 h-60 h-64 h-72 h-80 h-96
pt-1 pt-2 pt-3 pt-4 pt-5 pt-6 pt-7 pt-8 pt-9 pt-10
ml-0.5 ml-1 ml-1.5 ml-2 ml-2.5 ml-3 ml-3.5 ml-4 ml-4.5 ml-5 ml-5.5 ml-6
size-1 size-1.5 size-2 size-2.5 size-3 size-3.5 size-4 size-4.5 size-5 size-5.5 size-6 size-6.5 size-7 size-7.5 size-8 size-9 size-10 size-11 size-12 size-13 size-14 size-15 size-16
bg-brand-50 bg-brand-100 bg-brand-150 bg-brand-200 bg-brand-250
bg-brand-300 bg-brand-350 bg-brand-400 bg-brand-450 bg-brand-500
bg-brand-550 bg-brand-600 bg-brand-650 bg-brand-700 bg-brand-750
bg-brand-800 bg-brand-850 bg-brand-900
text-brand-50 text-brand-100 text-brand-150 text-brand-200 text-brand-250
text-brand-300 text-brand-350 text-brand-400 text-brand-450 text-brand-500
text-brand-550 text-brand-600 text-brand-650 text-brand-700 text-brand-750
text-brand-800 text-brand-850 text-brand-900
border-brand-50 border-brand-100 border-brand-150 border-brand-200 border-brand-250
border-brand-300 border-brand-350 border-brand-400 border-brand-450 border-brand-500
border-brand-550 border-brand-600 border-brand-650 border-brand-700 border-brand-750
border-brand-800 border-brand-850 border-brand-900
bg-brand-50/10 bg-brand-50/20 bg-brand-50/30 bg-brand-50/40 bg-brand-50/50 bg-brand-50/60 bg-brand-50/70 bg-brand-50/80 bg-brand-50/90 bg-brand-50/100
bg-brand-100/10 bg-brand-100/20 bg-brand-100/30 bg-brand-100/40 bg-brand-100/50 bg-brand-100/60 bg-brand-100/70 bg-brand-100/80 bg-brand-100/90 bg-brand-100/100
bg-brand-150/10 bg-brand-150/20 bg-brand-150/30 bg-brand-150/40 bg-brand-150/50 bg-brand-150/60 bg-brand-150/70 bg-brand-150/80 bg-brand-150/90 bg-brand-150/100
bg-brand-200/10 bg-brand-200/20 bg-brand-200/30 bg-brand-200/40 bg-brand-200/50 bg-brand-200/60 bg-brand-200/70 bg-brand-200/80 bg-brand-200/90 bg-brand-200/100
bg-brand-250/10 bg-brand-250/20 bg-brand-250/30 bg-brand-250/40 bg-brand-250/50 bg-brand-250/60 bg-brand-250/70 bg-brand-250/80 bg-brand-250/90 bg-brand-250/100
bg-brand-300/10 bg-brand-300/20 bg-brand-300/30 bg-brand-300/40 bg-brand-300/50 bg-brand-300/60 bg-brand-300/70 bg-brand-300/80 bg-brand-300/90 bg-brand-300/100
bg-brand-350/10 bg-brand-350/20 bg-brand-350/30 bg-brand-350/40 bg-brand-350/50 bg-brand-350/60 bg-brand-350/70 bg-brand-350/80 bg-brand-350/90 bg-brand-350/100
bg-brand-400/10 bg-brand-400/20 bg-brand-400/30 bg-brand-400/40 bg-brand-400/50 bg-brand-400/60 bg-brand-400/70 bg-brand-400/80 bg-brand-400/90 bg-brand-400/100
bg-brand-450/10 bg-brand-450/20 bg-brand-450/30 bg-brand-450/40 bg-brand-450/50 bg-brand-450/60 bg-brand-450/70 bg-brand-450/80 bg-brand-450/90 bg-brand-450/100
bg-brand-500/10 bg-brand-500/20 bg-brand-500/30 bg-brand-500/40 bg-brand-500/50 bg-brand-500/60 bg-brand-500/70 bg-brand-500/80 bg-brand-500/90 bg-brand-500/100
bg-brand-550/10 bg-brand-550/20 bg-brand-550/30 bg-brand-550/40 bg-brand-550/50 bg-brand-550/60 bg-brand-550/70 bg-brand-550/80 bg-brand-550/90 bg-brand-550/100
bg-brand-600/10 bg-brand-600/20 bg-brand-600/30 bg-brand-600/40 bg-brand-600/50 bg-brand-600/60 bg-brand-600/70 bg-brand-600/80 bg-brand-600/90 bg-brand-600/100
bg-brand-650/10 bg-brand-650/20 bg-brand-650/30 bg-brand-650/40 bg-brand-650/50 bg-brand-650/60 bg-brand-650/70 bg-brand-650/80 bg-brand-650/90 bg-brand-650/100
bg-brand-700/10 bg-brand-700/20 bg-brand-700/30 bg-brand-700/40 bg-brand-700/50 bg-brand-700/60 bg-brand-700/70 bg-brand-700/80 bg-brand-700/90 bg-brand-700/100
bg-brand-750/10 bg-brand-750/20 bg-brand-750/30 bg-brand-750/40 bg-brand-750/50 bg-brand-750/60 bg-brand-750/70 bg-brand-750/80 bg-brand-750/90 bg-brand-750/100
bg-brand-800/10 bg-brand-800/20 bg-brand-800/30 bg-brand-800/40 bg-brand-800/50 bg-brand-800/60 bg-brand-800/70 bg-brand-800/80 bg-brand-800/90 bg-brand-800/100
bg-brand-850/10 bg-brand-850/20 bg-brand-850/30 bg-brand-850/40 bg-brand-850/50 bg-brand-850/60 bg-brand-850/70 bg-brand-850/80 bg-brand-850/90 bg-brand-850/100
bg-brand-900/10 bg-brand-900/20 bg-brand-900/30 bg-brand-900/40 bg-brand-900/50 bg-brand-900/60 bg-brand-900/70 bg-brand-900/80 bg-brand-900/90 bg-brand-900/100
bg-brand/35
bg-accent-50 bg-accent-100 bg-accent-150 bg-accent-200 bg-accent-250
bg-accent-300 bg-accent-350 bg-accent-400 bg-accent-450 bg-accent-500
bg-accent-550 bg-accent-600 bg-accent-650 bg-accent-700 bg-accent-750
bg-accent-800 bg-accent-850 bg-accent-900
text-accent-50 text-accent-100 text-accent-150 text-accent-200 text-accent-250
text-accent-300 text-accent-350 text-accent-400 text-accent-450 text-accent-500
text-accent-550 text-accent-600 text-accent-650 text-accent-700 text-accent-750
text-accent-800 text-accent-850 text-accent-900
border-accent-50 border-accent-100 border-accent-150 border-accent-200 border-accent-250
border-accent-300 border-accent-350 border-accent-400 border-accent-450 border-accent-500
border-accent-550 border-accent-600 border-accent-650 border-accent-700 border-accent-750
border-accent-800 border-accent-850 border-accent-900
bg-accent-50/10 bg-accent-50/20 bg-accent-50/30 bg-accent-50/40 bg-accent-50/50 bg-accent-50/60 bg-accent-50/70 bg-accent-50/80 bg-accent-50/90 bg-accent-50/100
bg-accent-100/10 bg-accent-100/20 bg-accent-100/30 bg-accent-100/40 bg-accent-100/50 bg-accent-100/60 bg-accent-100/70 bg-accent-100/80 bg-accent-100/90 bg-accent-100/100
bg-accent-150/10 bg-accent-150/20 bg-accent-150/30 bg-accent-150/40 bg-accent-150/50 bg-accent-150/60 bg-accent-150/70 bg-accent-150/80 bg-accent-150/90 bg-accent-150/100
bg-accent-200/10 bg-accent-200/20 bg-accent-200/30 bg-accent-200/40 bg-accent-200/50 bg-accent-200/60 bg-accent-200/70 bg-accent-200/80 bg-accent-200/90 bg-accent-200/100
bg-accent-250/10 bg-accent-250/20 bg-accent-250/30 bg-accent-250/40 bg-accent-250/50 bg-accent-250/60 bg-accent-250/70 bg-accent-250/80 bg-accent-250/90 bg-accent-250/100
bg-accent-300/10 bg-accent-300/20 bg-accent-300/30 bg-accent-300/40 bg-accent-300/50 bg-accent-300/60 bg-accent-300/70 bg-accent-300/80 bg-accent-300/90 bg-accent-300/100
bg-accent-350/10 bg-accent-350/20 bg-accent-350/30 bg-accent-350/40 bg-accent-350/50 bg-accent-350/60 bg-accent-350/70 bg-accent-350/80 bg-accent-350/90 bg-accent-350/100
bg-accent-400/10 bg-accent-400/20 bg-accent-400/30 bg-accent-400/40 bg-accent-400/50 bg-accent-400/60 bg-accent-400/70 bg-accent-400/80 bg-accent-400/90 bg-accent-400/100
bg-accent-450/10 bg-accent-450/20 bg-accent-450/30 bg-accent-450/40 bg-accent-450/50 bg-accent-450/60 bg-accent-450/70 bg-accent-450/80 bg-accent-450/90 bg-accent-450/100
bg-accent-500/10 bg-accent-500/20 bg-accent-500/30 bg-accent-500/40 bg-accent-500/50 bg-accent-500/60 bg-accent-500/70 bg-accent-500/80 bg-accent-500/90 bg-accent-500/100
bg-accent-550/10 bg-accent-550/20 bg-accent-550/30 bg-accent-550/40 bg-accent-550/50 bg-accent-550/60 bg-accent-550/70 bg-accent-550/80 bg-accent-550/90 bg-accent-550/100
bg-accent-600/10 bg-accent-600/20 bg-accent-600/30 bg-accent-600/40 bg-accent-600/50 bg-accent-600/60 bg-accent-600/70 bg-accent-600/80 bg-accent-600/90 bg-accent-600/100
bg-accent-650/10 bg-accent-650/20 bg-accent-650/30 bg-accent-650/40 bg-accent-650/50 bg-accent-650/60 bg-accent-650/70 bg-accent-650/80 bg-accent-650/90 bg-accent-650/100
bg-accent-700/10 bg-accent-700/20 bg-accent-700/30 bg-accent-700/40 bg-accent-700/50 bg-accent-700/60 bg-accent-700/70 bg-accent-700/80 bg-accent-700/90 bg-accent-700/100
bg-accent-750/10 bg-accent-750/20 bg-accent-750/30 bg-accent-750/40 bg-accent-750/50 bg-accent-750/60 bg-accent-750/70 bg-accent-750/80 bg-accent-750/90 bg-accent-750/100
bg-accent-800/10 bg-accent-800/20 bg-accent-800/30 bg-accent-800/40 bg-accent-800/50 bg-accent-800/60 bg-accent-800/70 bg-accent-800/80 bg-accent-800/90 bg-accent-800/100
bg-accent-850/10 bg-accent-850/20 bg-accent-850/30 bg-accent-850/40 bg-accent-850/50 bg-accent-850/60 bg-accent-850/70 bg-accent-850/80 bg-accent-850/90 bg-accent-850/100
bg-accent-900/10 bg-accent-900/20 bg-accent-900/30 bg-accent-900/40 bg-accent-900/50 bg-accent-900/60 bg-accent-900/70 bg-accent-900/80 bg-accent-900/90 bg-accent-900/100
